Topic Sentence : There should be limits to our access to information to some extent.
Elaboration : It might violate one's privacy when they have too much information. However, In order for a society too grow, we need more information.
Examples/Evidence : For example when someone knows about the national military, they could tell other nations to when to attack or when to not. Also, If someone knows about a person's private information such as a credit card number or the bank account's password, They can possibly bankrupt one. On the other hand, there should be access to information to let the society grow.
Explanation/ Analysis : When a person from the country could be a spy for an other country. If that man knows about the national military, the nation is in great danger. If there are no limits to our access of information's, then the nation could be in danger. Although, we guess that we need to limit our access to information sometimes we need more information. If you get into a car accident and lost a lot of blood, you need blood. If your information is very secret and don't know what blood type you are, you are in very great danger.
Link Sentences : Therefore, I believe that there should be limits on information that we get to some portions.
Elaboration : It might violate one's privacy when they have too much information. However, In order for a society too grow, we need more information.
Examples/Evidence : For example when someone knows about the national military, they could tell other nations to when to attack or when to not. Also, If someone knows about a person's private information such as a credit card number or the bank account's password, They can possibly bankrupt one. On the other hand, there should be access to information to let the society grow.
Explanation/ Analysis : When a person from the country could be a spy for an other country. If that man knows about the national military, the nation is in great danger. If there are no limits to our access of information's, then the nation could be in danger. Although, we guess that we need to limit our access to information sometimes we need more information. If you get into a car accident and lost a lot of blood, you need blood. If your information is very secret and don't know what blood type you are, you are in very great danger.
Link Sentences : Therefore, I believe that there should be limits on information that we get to some portions.